After reviewing what changes to make, I have edited a second draft of Scene 37 from Watching and Waiting.
I have raised the volume of background noise at the beginning, while also lowering the volume of the dialogue overall. This made the scene both less empty at the start and less uncomfortably loud at the beginning.
Also, I have included shots of Lisa and Michael leaving the building, as my last edit didn't show the two leaving and made it look like they mysteriously disappeared. The fix adds more continuity here.
A loud door shutting was complained about it the first draft, so I replaced the audio clip with a different one and the ending of the scene is now much better.
https://youtu.be/BQ0KEUKH4Os
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